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Last month I made a poem. It only took me a few minutes though 'cause I didn't mind if it rhymed or not or if it used fancy words, I just kept writing.
The next day, I showed it to my best friend and asked for her interpretation. She wasn't good at poetry, but she's not terrible either. Her interpretation was wrong.
I went around and showed it to my other friends and also asked for their interpretations. Some interpretations were applicable, but they were no where near my original message. I even asked the smartest people I knew. One of them said he hated it, while one of them said it was about me. Applicable and quite good too, but still too far from my original message.
Up to this date I keep asking people for their interpretations but they either say they don't understand or they gave the usual wrong interpretations.
I was just hoping I could find someone here who would get the original message...

Stop, don't leave me here
And don't expect me to save you.
To walk with me is your choice
But to help you isn't mine.

Don't stop, even if I don't rhyme,
You shouldn't expect me to and neither should I.
So what if our shoes aren't the same size?
We both have feet, right?

Stay, but don't push me off--
Neither would I, if I could hold on.
It might be difficult, the equilibrium,
But at least none would get hurt.

Look away, don't melt my soul.
It isn't supposed to be liquid.
Melt me and I guarantee
Much worse would come back to you.

Don't fear me, I'm not a coyote
That'll gobble your existence up.
'Tis also for your sake, is it not?
And is it not also for mine?

But please do so, when things get bad.
Break the same rule we follow.
If it's for the other, don't worry,
You will still be able to stand again.

It's the same for me though
So don't shiver in fright.
As long as the see-saw is 180degrees,
Father won't kick you out yet.

Moreover, don't keep it inside,
You might get a heart attack.
Push me off once I get too heavy;
I'm ready to let go if it's for you.

Aren't things better this way?
The result is not undefined.
I'm sure you'll be pleased, and others too.
I don't have to prove it, you'll see.
 

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Addressed toward a bother/lover, this is about independence/dependence. Sometimes you feel pushed and taken advantage of, and you want the persons to know how things are..setting up the ground rules for contacting you. You see yourself and persons in question as equals, independent yet dependent.
 

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I think the most interesting thing about poetry is that its meaning is hidden, which allows individuals to relate to it because they can interpret it in different ways. I also write poetry and most of my poetry is very metaphorical and not really about what it appears like on the surface at all. I recently showed a couple of friends a poem and one thought it was about me missing a close friend and the other thought it was about rape and lost innocence...in reality it was about something much more personal and symbolic.

I'm not really sure as to the meaning of your poem, it seems like it could have a lot of different meanings. I think the obvious interpretation would be that you had a relationship where it was better for the people involved to distance themselves from each other. But I'm guessing it's not as simple as that. So I'll just throw a guess out there that seems like at least one possible interpretation:

It could be about finding balance in life and keeping your identity, accepting that we can go through life with people but ultimately we're all on our own journey and have to make our own decisions. Recognizing the differences that may exist between people that can often cause hurt, which may make it better to keep them at a distance, but that they're still human beings dealing with the same struggles and it shouldn't prevent us from caring about them. Not pushing people out of your life, but recognizing that they can't save you.

I'm interested to hear your intended meaning though! :tongue:
 

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It could be about finding balance in life and keeping your identity, accepting that we can go through life with people but ultimately we're all on our own journey and have to make our own decisions. Recognizing the differences that may exist between people that can often cause hurt, which may make it better to keep them at a distance, but that they're still human beings dealing with the same struggles and it shouldn't prevent us from caring about them. Not pushing people out of your life, but recognizing that they can't save you.

I'm interested to hear your intended meaning though! :tongue:
That's pretty close to my original intended meaning. Actually, it's very close to that. I consider it correct. I'm impressed, you were the first one to decipher it. I clap for you. *clap clap clap*
 

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That's pretty close to my original intended meaning. Actually, it's very close to that. I consider it correct. I'm impressed, you were the first one to decipher it. I clap for you. *clap clap clap*
Well, I'm pleased then. *bows* I like your style of writing and it's something I can relate to. Not sure anyone's ever gotten the correct interpretation out of one of my poems. I'd be happy to exchange poetry in the future if you're interested. :wink:
 
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